Friday, July 2, 2010

HW,MS 4TH OF JULY,

First of all, Fourth of July is a celebration in The United States OF America,
in the 4TH of July every one is celebrate,because this is independents Day,
Imean We can say United State is free from great brition, And We always celebrate in 4th of July,Me and my family are going to the beach,and to the Zoo in Ohio State.
IF We ask any one WHO celebrates in the 4TH of July ? the answer is U.S.A.
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2 comments:

  1. ELI Spring/SummerJuly 5, 2010 at 5:32 AM

    Hello Mohamed!

    This still needs a lot of work.

    1. Where did you get your evidence?
    2. You need more supporting details in this work. What is your topic sentence? How have you supported it?
    3. There are many capitalization and spelling mistakes!

    Rewrite this and then I'll change your grade!~

    :-) Kristi
    5/15

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  2. mohamed-alomariJuly 9, 2010 at 5:52 AM

    HELLO, I DID ANOTHER ONR

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